100 Word Challenge by Haylie
CRUNCH! SNAP! CRACKLE! That is what is spoken softly. Most people don’t listen, because they decide to ignore the message within. Listen closely, only one with a quiet mouth and a open heart can hear the sweet message. The people who ignore the sweet message are the ones who have a loud mouth and a heart locked tight. If you listen with your heart the message will appear, but if you reject them, you will end up in the lake. The Lake of Legs. This lake shows no mercy. It will tear you apart and keep your legs for decoration.
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15lochlainn
11/7/2013 05:34:56 pm
Nice cliff Hanger I like the bit wher u said it tears you apart and keeps your legs for decoration
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Sarah
11/7/2013 09:44:34 pm
I like the way you used a lot of description. It is an amazing story with lots of detail and I like how the story.
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Andy Knill Team. 100 WC
11/10/2013 04:09:47 am
Wow what a great piece and very imaginative. I was curious at how your start would link to the picture and I did not expect that link. congratulations.
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jessica
11/10/2013 05:32:49 pm
our class did that hundred word challenge aswell. your challenge was very good we did it with two people so it was easier . I loved your opening sentence CRUNCH!SNAP!CRACKLE!
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Susan
11/26/2013 06:37:20 pm
Nice disciption Heylie!
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11/27/2013 07:52:30 am
Wow! That is an amazing 100 word challenge paragraph, Haylie. The depth of this paragraph is amazing. You must have worked extremely hard. The message of the story is very strong, the way you described that only someone with a quiet mouth and a open heart can hear the sweet message. Then the opposite person with a loud mouth and a heart locked tight with a lot of force can't hear it. I like how you explained the Lake of Legs. How did you think of this writing piece?
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