100 Word Challenge by Nina
Once there was a girl named Isabella and she went to a market to buy an orange so she can eat it for her dinner when she gets hungry. Then when she got out of the store she went and walked n the sidewalk and she met a turtle. It waved to the girl and the girl waved back the turtle did it in a really funny way. They were talking the whole time till they came to the house, and the things that they were talking about were really interesting. Then they went back to their house and said that they will see each other the next day…
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Drew
10/3/2013 08:15:16 pm
Hi I'm Drew and is loved your story. I loved the way the girl went out of the shops and emidietly met the turtle.
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I think yu should use more detailed sentences and add full stops not run on sentence form. I liked the bit that read "there was a girl named Isabella and she went to a market to buy an orange so she can eat it for her dinner" that really worked well. Good job
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Joseph
10/6/2013 06:51:24 pm
Amazing
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10/6/2013 11:18:31 pm
Well done, this is a great entry. I wonder what will happen tomorrow? Next time try reading back through your entry to make sure it flows and check the grammar.
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