Text by Anton and Sophia
Breaking a Foot
By Sophia
the hockey game
By Anton
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Text by Anton and Sophia Have you ever seen a movie with really slow parts? These parts are in something called slow motion. But not only movies can use slow motion, writing can as well! This week we are writing slow motion paragraphs to describe a moment in our lives. Using our five senses we describe important details and actions in that event. Here are two examples of slow motion writing. Enjoy. Breaking a Foot By Sophia I sneezed. Snot came dripping down from my nose. Quickly, I paused the loud music I had been listening to. I ran down the hall. I could feel the freezing floor under my bare feet. I was putting my left foot down. Then my right foot. Then I put down my left foot. Suddenly, the side of my foot gave away. Round twisted my foot, accompanied by a loud crack sound. Pain flooded my body. I plonked down onto the hard, cold floor unable to walk any further. Tears filled my eyes. Soon, I was crying. My parents rushed upstairs. Every footstep that I could hear on the stairs meant the world to me. I knew they could help me. With the help of my dad I limped to the bath. The side of my foot was already the size of a mandarin! While my mom ran my foot under cold water my dad called the ambulance. I waited. Every second my foot was getting redder and redder. Each time my heart beat, my foot throbbed. It was a horrible feeling of pain. The minutes felt like hours. Soon, the ambulance arrived. I was relieved. Now I would get the proper treatment. the hockey gameBy Anton It’s our last 30 seconds of our hockey game. I looked around and see scared faces of the players, because we are playing against very good team. The display shows the score, 1:0 for our team. I look to my right and I see Eddy looking very tired and sweaty. The coach turns to my side and orders me to replace Eddy. I jumped over the board and try to go really fast to take my place. All the players are in opposite group team. Their best player takes a puck and starts to skate. He is really fast and I try to get him, but he is faster than me. I became angry. I start to skate faster and faster. Then I jumped to the puck and try to get it. Our Goalkeeper looks very scared, because he thinks that he is going to lose this puck and score will be 1:1. Then finally I get the puck. I am so happy, because I saved our team and we won! Every one cheers and I can see our players excited and smiling.
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Owen Millikan
4/16/2013 04:30:07 am
Cool! I think hockey isn't my favorite sport, but it is definitely cool to watch. Now you talked about how everyone felt sweaty and scared, but what about you? Did you feel any different? http://www.kidblog.org/mrsbeardensclass2012
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Anton
4/16/2013 09:47:56 pm
Hi Owen! I played hockey for 6 years! That is why I feel excited!
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